英语四六级写作.ppt

Which one is better?
It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.
It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.
It will be our aim to ensure proper health care for each and every one of the Chinese people.
Our aim is to ensure proper health care for all Chinese.
第一页
Which one is better?
The search of the forest that they conducted was entirely complete.
The search of the forest was complete.
They conducted a complete search of the forest.
He has no sense of principles, whether he is in public or in private.
He has no principles, public or private.
第二页
Which one is better?
Whenever anyone telephoned her to ask her for help with their homework she always obliged right away.
She immediately obliged anyone who telephoned for help with homework.
第三页
Which one is better?
Another important aspect is good health. It is one of our great blessings. It may be achieved through proper diet and exercise. Rest is also desirable.
The great blessing of good health may be had through proper diet, exercise, and rest.
第四页
写作技巧--简洁才是美
策略之一：用介词短语替代从句。
Wordy:While they were playing tennis, she started an argument that lasted all morning.
Better:During tennis she started an argument that lasted all morning.
Wordy:When you come to the second traffic light, turn right.
Better:At the second traffic light turn left.
第五页
写作技巧--简洁才是美
策略之二：删除诸如"who is”或"that is"之类的关系代词，变从句为短语。
Wordy:The novel, which is written in three parts, told a story that took place in the Middle Ages.
Better:The three-part novel told a story set in the Middle Ages.
第六页
写作技巧--简洁才是美
策略之三：剔除你不需要的单词
Two joint partners will present their views over a long-distance telephone call.
写完这样的句子后，你自己再读一遍，挑出单词joint和telephone，注意删去不必要的词。
第七页
写作技巧--简洁才是美
策略之四：表达否定意义时，尽量避免使用否定词。英语中很多词不用 no 或者not也能表达否定含义的词汇。
Thus college students who do not have sufficient financial backing ,
也就是 college s