中式英语之鉴.doc

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Part One: Unnecessary Words
All authorities on the style of English prose agree that good writing is concise. Carefew examples (A) with suggested revisions (B)and comments in brackets.
加快经济改革步伐
A: to accelerate the pace of economic reform
B: to accelerate economic reform
(To accelerate = to increase the pace of )
农业获得大丰收
A: There have been good harvests in agriculture.
B: There have been good harvests.
[“Harvest〞 implies agriculture: there are no harvests in industry.]
城乡人民生活水平持续上升。
A: Living standards for the people in both urban and rural areas continued to rise.
B: Living standards in both urban and rural areas continued to rise.
【The notion of living standards applies only to people.】
这些困难从本质上说是暂时的。
A： These hardships are temporary in nature.
B: These hardships are temporary.
[Any adjectives describes the “ nature〞 or “character〞 of the noun it modifies . To say that hardships are
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“temporary in nature〞 is like saying that the Chinese flag is red in color〞 or that pandas are few in number.〞]
我国未来的经济开展在很大程度上有赖于……
A：The development of our economy in the future will, to a large extent, depend on…
B: The development of our economy will, to a large extent, depend on…
[ The future tense of the verb(will depend) is sufficient to express futurity.]
我们应采取一系列措施来保证……
A: we should adopt a series of measures to ensure that….
B: we should adopt m