作文范文之雅思作文5.5.docx

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● 作文题目：剑桥11 test4大作文
many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. ● 考生原文
as the development of cities, it is hard to decide put which part of society to the first place. governments hold that economy plays a leader role in cities’ development, whereas some citizens insist that other types of progress are also significant. in my opinion, i agree with the later argument.
many governments may think that only having prosperous economy can keep the society peaceful and stable. it is because strong economy can make sure that almost every resident has basic income and enjoys some welfare from governments. however, if economy suffers depressions, the living qualities of citizens will decrease, which will cause people lose a sense of happiness. the worst result is that the number of criminals will increase, having a detrimental impact on the stability of society and the safety of residents.
on the other hand, some people who believe developing other kinds of progress are also necessary,as our country and
some cities do not suffer economic severe problems which provide an appropriate social environment to construct other areas, such as educational institutions which can access more people to attain the opportunity to acquire knowledge. more importantly, it is education that can make young generations who are the successors of our country more competitive and knowledgeable. also, it is essential for government to p