晨哥说:占用你的休息时间真是不好意思,第一篇有点迟,麻烦董君同学多改点,多写点建议哈。。。。。。。他日必有重谢
As we can see from the two picturePicture是可数的,帅哥。
,great changes will have taken place in the shortage of water resource in the short future. In today’s picture这个好奇怪,我觉得改成in the picture of today会不会好点
, there is a man holding a 要用an umbrella
umbrella to avoid a huge number of rainA huge number of是形容可数的,不可数用a large/huge amount of. 大雨就用heavy rain就行了吧,新概念三有用heavy shower的,看你敢不敢用。
drops on the green lawn我怎么觉得他是在保护自己,而不是the grass. There is a man holding an umbrella to protect himself from (being attacked by) the heavy rain. Attacked是我乱用的,你看能不找个好点儿的词。
. WhileWhile好像是一句话中用的,…, while…可以用by/in contrast
in tomorrow's picture, there es only one rain能这么说么!!!
drop catched crazily by the man on the dry and cracking land .
As far as I am concerned, the shortage of water resource我觉得是water resources
demonstrated in the above我认为不用这个above,或许是我矫情了~~~
pictures is a worrisome problem all the time. Some people can’t seeDo not realize会好点吧。是没有意识到问题而不是没有看到问题。
it’s importance and abuse water without a limit .what’s worse, with the fast developingDevelopment 形容词后加名词
of modern industries, the 去掉
larger damage is Has been
produced by some factories for俺不懂for在这里是啥意思。后面那半句也不懂
the water resource with the lake of law.
To prevent such undesirable situation from happening,we should spare no efforts in protecting water resource. Law
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