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The possible solutions are always under discussion at both personal and government level. Some people suggested that government ought to check the amount of polluted discharged and force companies to process the effluent in order to reduce the pollution. Another effective measure
is that governments should offer financial assistance to economically disadvatanged ones and provide various types of community activities. That can help citizens to relieve negative moods and encouraging them to slowdown their life pace. What is more, families' concerns should be proposed in particular for elderly and youth who are have difficulty in fit modern life.
Despite some disadvantages of city life including pollution, congestion contribution to enrich our lifestyle diversity cannot be denied and it is

and rapid important

life pace,
to take full

its
advantage of it by introducing strict regulations to restrict the pollutants emission.
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Nowadays, people are more likely to move to cities due ( 意思不适合，多为贬义，改为 owing) to the
fact that they believe that city life is much better than